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[this is good]
i've always liked poems that start out with quotes. I like that you're experimenting with form and rhyme. this one simply sways as to music, and the way it's lined reminds me of a pendulum, heaving to one side then the other.. and the juxtaposition here within each stanza is pretty remarkable, especially in the last stanza, where you not only set old/absence and young/presence next to each other, but even loop them around back into each other, like a friendship bracelet. very good, p. i've no suggestions.

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